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 Please revise the Essay in response to assessment feeback provided and any outside sources. Consult the original prompt, introductory video for this assignment, as well as the rubric included below for further clarification. 

!the first work file is the essay that need to revise, the following 5 pdf files are support reading source

the feedback:

 you have some unique ideas in this paper. Make sure that you are really following the prompt/rubric when writing. A lot of your discussion is good but seems slightly tangental to the argument- rather than spending time on historical commentary instead focus your attention more to dealing with the goals of the movement and connecting this to the works of your choice. 

the rubric:

 CriteriaRatingsPts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeRevised Content of Essay–response to assessment feedbackRevised essay evidences response to assessment feedback in areas such as:
a) socio-cultural context
b) how gendered identity was commony conceived
c) common goals
d) common artistic strategies such as collaboration, performance, “craft” materials, etc.

2.5 ptsRevised essay thoroughly summarizes lectures and readings concerning the key characteristics and goals of the “first generation” of feminist arts in the U.S.

1.5 ptsRevised essay partially summarizes lectures and readings concerning the key characteristics and goals of the “first generation” of feminist arts in the U.S.

0.5 ptsRevised essay inadequately and/or innaccurately summarizes lectures and readings concerning the key characteristics and goals of the “first generation” of feminist arts in the U.S.

0.0 ptsInadequate changes were made to the revised draft in response to assessment on this area of evaluation

2.5 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeRevised essay responds to assessment feedback concerning “essentialism” in relation to “first generation” feminist arts in the U.S.

0.5 ptsRevised essay evidences a thorough and accurate explanation of “essentialism” in relation to “first generation” feminist arts

0.25 ptsThe revised discussion of “essenialism” needs some improvement–see comments

0.0 ptsInadequate changes were made to the revised draft in response to assessment on this area of evaluation

0.5 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeRevised introductory paragraph responds to assessment feedback

2.0 ptsThe revised introductory paragraph summarizes the socio-historical context women faced at the time and leads to a thesis that clearly articulates the movement’s main goals.

1.0 ptsThe revised introductory paragraph partially summarizes the socio-historical context women faced at the time and/or lacks a thesis that clearly articulates the movement’s main goals.

0.0 ptsInadequate changes were made to the revised draft in response to assessment on this area of evaluation

2.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeRevised body paragraphs and examples respond to assessment feedback

3.0 ptsAppropriate examples were chosen, and each paragraph clearly supports the thesis of the revised essay

2.0 ptsAppropriate examples may not have been chosen, and/or each paragraph does not clearly support the thesis of the revised essay

1.0 ptsMinimal revisions were made in response to assessment feedback in this area of evaluation

0.0 ptsInadequate changes were made to the revised draft in response to assessment on this area of evaluation

3.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeRevised conclusion in response to assessment feedback

2.0 ptsThe revised conclusion summarizes the main points of the essay and includes a thoughtful reflection on the student’s informed views of the impact of the movement, including its successes as well as shortcomings

1.0 ptsThe revised conclusion partially summarizes the main points of the essay and/or includes a cursory reflection on the student’s informed views of the impact of the movement, including its successes as well as shortcomings

0.0 ptsInadequate changes were made to the revised draft in response to assessment on this area of evaluation

2.0 pts

Total Points: 10.0